The paragraph doesnt flow very well because of all the simple sentences. it has a very simple rythm and the most important ideas are "<span>As a young girl, she struggled a great deal. She left home at 21. She moved to the West Coast. There, she chose to educate herself. She chose studies over security. She lived in poverty for many years. She eventually got a job teaching at university." This is because it stays on topic. Everything else really isnt important.The ideas are all spread out and really dont connect very well. TO improve this paragraph you need to connect the sentenes and change some to stay on topic.</span>
Many people are willing to suffer in order for the greater good. They feel that if their efforts and suffering can improve the lives of countless people, then their suffering was worth it.
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In formal writing and communication, the sentence "Mom said she thought Maria had been treated wrongly and that she should stick up for herself." is more appropriate. Although wrong and wrongly are both adverbs, some writers consider using adverbial "wrong" as incorrect, so you might want to play it safe and use "wrongly" instead.
That the applicant is hardworking, educated, and mindful of details. - Apex
