Question

During our summer vacations, we would always go out to our cabin by Butterfly Creek. The trips were always fun and relaxing. We would take hikes, photograph the wildlife, and swim in the river. Wildflowers in high meadows. Butterflies hovering. I still remember the smell of pine canyons when I think about those years. What is the biggest problem with this paragraph? There are several spelling mistakes. There are repeated words. There are fragments. There are not enough details.

Answer 1

The correct answer is: there are fragments.

Sentence fragments are groups of words that look like a sentence. However, they are not one because they lack either a subject or a word. Fragments don't form a complete thought and they don't exist on their own, without a previous content.

In the paragraph, there are two fragments sentences : Wildflowers in high meadows and Butterflies hovering. Although the reader can connect them to the overall description, they don't fit into the description correctly as they are not personal. The reader can only notice the given facts without knowing how they are related to the writer's experience: if the writer saw or liked them for example. They lack personal pronouns that make the description a personal account of a story.

Answer 2

If you read it out loud, or to yourself, you should hear some repetition in the writing.