The best answer that I can see is the first one: divide long sentences into shorter ones. There were several sentences that were run-ons, and dividing them up would help.
On a side note, this passage is VERY poorly written. there are issues with commas and dangling modifiers throughout that can't be fixed with any of the options provided.
oof this is prob gonna be hard for u if u wanna know how to get people to do it quicker just copy the link and put it on answered questions in the chat box xd
