Read the excerpt from a student’s rhetorical analysis essay. Barone and Ware provide a variety of quantitative evidence that sug
gests that a career ladder for teachers improves teacher retention. For example, they cite exit interviews with teachers leaving the profession. Over 80% of respondents cite that having few opportunities for advancement was a reason to leave the profession. Which sentence is an example of effective commentary on the evidence used in this paragraph? A career ladder is a system where people can advance to higher levels of responsibility and compensation. Data collected from exiting teachers provide support for the implementation of new pathways in teaching careers, like a career ladder, to retain teachers. The authors studied several reasons that people left the teaching profession, including the lack of opportunities for advancement. The author makes a connection to the audience by writing about the importance of retaining talented teachers through implementing career ladders.
A career ladder is a system where people can advance to higher levels of responsibility and compensation.
Explanation:
Effective commentary is simply giving an opinion or an interpretation, analysis, or evaluation about details of an essay. It is simply making a point of what you read.
The sentence that is an example of effective commentary on the evidence used in the paragraph is option A because they gave their opinion on what a career ladder is; which is a system where people can advance to higher levels of responsibility and compensation.
The most obvious differences are the lack of much scenery or many props and the role of the stage manager as one who talks to the audience. We'll also see, as we progress, the lack of a real "plot" since the play is one simply describing ordinary life.
