The answer is summarize your main points. My english teachers have been hammering this into me for like 4 years so I know this is right.
"in the snow *was one of.."
"offers more *then a time for *children to have fun.."
"to do in the winter now and it's unfortunate.."
"..find the wintertime unpleasant"
"should *go outside and enjoy.."
"I am glad I grew up where it snows"
I recommend these changes as well as limiting the number of times you say snow and replace it with a different word, as well as using more descriptive adjectives
They have different numbers of neutrons.