In general you want to be a bit more concise in forming a thesis statement. Usually you should shoot for between 1 and 2 sentences summarizing your argument in a concise way so that it is easily understandable to the reader. I would take what you have written and look for your main argument and try and put that in 1 to 2 sentences.
Answer: I want to be a chef beacause cooking is a great hobby.
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You want to locate the BEST/MAIN POINTS/EVENTS that are relevant to the story. Then, you summarize those key points into your own words, and create your own "story"
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instead of wating for an answer you can do it now and get over it JUst to let u know and i dont think people would spend there time in doing so, just giving you a heads up.
