Read the paragraph.(1) We went to the Museum of Natural Science to see the new gem exhibit. (2) The display included and showed
minerals from all over the world. (3) The most impressive part of the show was the extensive display of diamonds and other precious stones.Which revision makes one of the sentences more concise?A.Sentence 1: Delete the word “gem.”B.Sentence 2: Delete the phrase “and showed.”C.Sentence 3: Change “impressive” to “interesting.”D.Sentence 3: Change “show” to “exhibit.”
The revision which makes the sentence more concise is 2: delete the phrase " and showed" which is not necessary when we already have the term "The display" that means that something is being exhibited, presented to view.
"We went to the Museum of Natural Science to see the new gem exhibit. The display included and showed minerals from all over the world. The most impressive part of the show was the extensive display of diamonds and other precious stones"
