Answer: Maybe you should add some of your personal experience to give it a more dramatic tone to it add some interesting charterers and give it some twists here are there GOOD LUCK :)
Have good Diction. As in, make sure you have correctly placed and strong vocabulary words. Imagine you are in the scene. How does it smell? Feel? Try to describe those things in detail, for a more sensory feel to it. I love books that go into detail, and those tend to catch people’s attention. These are just a few tips. Good luck!
