I believe that you should just check your spelling , capitalize some I's and the word January .
You should also give more detail about the Sunday event.
When you say the word conclusion I begin to think about a short paragraph / summary , this means you should bring the reader in , draw my attention to your mint idea.
I really hope that I'm helping you , :)
Answer:
Because darry dropped out of college to watch his two brothers and so he wants pony to get a chance at education because he didn't
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