Hi I think you did a pretty good job on this, but as you know nothing is perfect!
I would recommend adding more transitions, ending it with something more special, use more advanced words than the basic ones, more parallelism and have a better intro but overall I think it's very lovely.
Also you could say something like "Today, I would like to thank all those incredible people who have helped me become who I am today and show my gratitude through this small essay/or whatever.
charlie at the end of the story is mostly the same but at the end he was a little bit smarter, and aware that he was once smart. now he feels humiliated b/c he isn't as smart as he once was.
D. Parallelism The answer is parallelism because the structure of this excerpt stays consistent throughout these three sentences, it starts off with "it does not" in each sentence which creates a structure.
