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Yes but there's a mistake.
Mistake: Some where in the middle
It says "Oh hey, my im Osric, we better get started".
You have to fix Oh hey, my im Osric to, "Oh hey, I'm Osric".
But, other things are that this is very creative, it mentions words like, "Vividly, rare, miniature, rigid, desolate and lingered. These are very creative words.
And yes, thanks for that awesome lil' story!
The element that is most likely to be featured in a work of realistic fiction is "well-defined character suggested by actual experience." This would provide the most realistic character.
I think you need to show the passage first to get ur answers