The revision that would help expand the ideas in the excerpt is <span>adding more specifics about the sailors' beliefs about the island.
</span>The author just mentions their beliefs briefly, but doesn't really expand on that topic, which may be relevant further down in the text. This is why I believe that adding such details is important to include in this essay to make it more detailed and easy to understand.
John Winthrop:Winthrop was a Puritan who sailed from England to what is modern day New England. He served as governor of the Massachusetts Bay Colony for many years. Winthrop kept a detailed journal of the happenings in New England. He also wrote the sermon, "A Model of Christian Charity," which basically said that the Puritans of New England needed to be an example of how to live a Godly life.
<span>Jonathan Edwards: Edwards was a preacher in New England. He is probably most famous for his sermon "Sinners in the Hands of an Angry God."</span>
The point of view is told in first person and the character is Scout.
Edit: Much obliged Dee. My bad :)
