Read the paragraph from Gordon’s personal narrative. 1 When I first entered the room, I was really struck by what I saw. 2 It wa
s my first day of cooking lessons, and I was on my way to fulfilling my dreams of one day becoming a chef in my own world-renowned restaurant. 3 I had spent countless hours of my childhood watching my parents, both professional chefs, prepare savory meals for my sisters and me. 4 From them, I had already obtained a solid foundation of cooking basics. 5 However, it was in this room that I would build upon those basics and begin my ascent as a chef in my own right. Which sentence should Gordon revise to make it more precise, and why? Gordon should revise sentence 1 to provide specific details about what “struck” him as he first entered the room. Gordon should revise sentence 2 to describe his dreams more clearly and explain what he hopes to accomplish one day. Gordon should revise sentence 3 to replace vague words like “countless” and “delicious” with more precise adjectives. Gordon should revise sentence 4 to add detailed examples about the many cooking basics he learned from his parents.
Answer: A. Gordon should revise sentence 1 to provide specific details about what “struck” him as he first entered the room.
Explanation: In the given paragraph from Gordon's personal narrative, we can see the description of how he started his studies to become a professional chef and how that was his dream since he was a kid, and watched his parents (that were chefs) cooking delicious things. But in the first sentence he says that he saw something that left him struck, he doesn't explain what is that he saw, so he should revise that sentence to provide specific details.
