A lot of descriptive imagery, excellent setting and sophisticated language. Use of punctuation is varied and concise which effectively engages the readers to continue reading.
One problem is sentence length. No examiner wants to mark your exam and immediately get hit in the face with a chunk of words. Separate your paragraphs individually.
The sentence which uses quotation marks correctly is: "How are your classes?" asked Xavier. When using quotation marks with a question sentence, always include the question mark inside the quotation marks and a comma after the quoted sentence is no longer necessary.
Answer:
Returned
Only word that will fit in after Ms. Adams
