Okay. So. First of all, rlly nice story =D I'm glad you got what you wanted. Now, to the point.. at first, I started to list every point where i thought you can change, but to be honest, and i mean no offense when i say this, but i think itll take me a very long time and a printed out version to mark it up so i think ill jjust give u a couple of tips. I hope they help.
- you dont exactly have any main idea going... only after reading the entire thing did i understand what "the battle" was and why you were anxious to get the results. you should clarify in the beginning what it is youre talking abt. a sentence like " Sixth grade had just started, and already I had begun to lose focus. My brain seemed to constantly drift towards other, more important things; like the upcoming custody battle between my parents over my brother and I."
-dont use the same word over and over again. try not to use it more than twice in one paragraph, it becomes repetitive, and a little annoying to read. An example: '<span>That battle was cemented in my head, all I could do was think about that battle.', I would change the second "battle" to "it"... you can do the same to other sentences, just look up synonyms and replce them, itll mean the same thing.
- Also, words like "socializing" might be too strong a word to use.... you can put 'talking' lol... its important to remember that you dont always have to use big words, and especially when youre writing a personal narrative, you should stick to ones you use on a day to day basis... save the big ones for formal essays :)
- the tenses seem to change throughout the story.... you start out correctly. in the past tense, and then u use a verb in the future tense, such as "will happen"
- don't add details you dont need or dont support the main idea... like the part about forgetting your brother. its just a side detail. or u can change how u introduce that detail. instead of the two or three sentences about forgetting him, u can just write " I was so anxious and excited to find out what the results were that i forgot to pick up my younger brother on my way back home from school, and ended up having to go all the way back to get him, prolonging the suspense."
If you want more specific details on where to change exactly what, i suggest you go to someone in person, they might be able to help you more. Best of luck! </span>
"<u>There are as mad, abandon'd Criticks too</u>" and "<u>With his own Tongue still edifies his Ears</u>" follow the established rhyme scheme.
What is rhyme scheme?
The arrangement of rhymes at the conclusion of each line in a poem or song is known as a rhyme scheme. Lines identified with the same letter all rhyme with one another, which is the standard method of referencing it.
From Robert Herrick's poem <u>"To Anthea, who may Command him Anything,"</u> the following is an illustration of the ABAB rhyme scheme: Lines with the same letter in their designation rhyme with one another. For example, the first and third lines of a stanza—the "As"—and the second and fourth lines—the "Bs"—rhyme with one another in the rhyme scheme ABAB.
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Judging by those answer choices provided above, it is safe to say a phone dialer is not needed so we can exclude that from the problem. A milestone is like a huge discovery, which does not make too much sense here. Which leaves us with two semi correct answers. Both C and D. A to do list would be great, but you would need to organize what you will do for the entire week before making a to do list, which leaves you with your best option!
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I am, yours most sincerely
Joshua A. Bunn
Answer:
A.By conveying a mood and point of view to a audience
Explanation:
My answer is not 100% correct, take what you think will help you :) I hope this helps
It is important as she needs to learn how to react to important situations. Having a good impression towards people will later on bring many benefits to her.
Helen Keller's father didn't discipline his child, and now his child. She is also deaf and blind which makes things more challenging for her to learn so this gives Helen more motivation to teach her.
