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I was going to the park and all of a sudden I found a puppy! I decided to take it to the vet to make sure it had an owner so I could find the person. The dog didn’t have a owner so I thought I would keep it! I named her Rosie and she is a golden retriever puppy! I’m am so happy I decided to keep her!
Sorry if this isn’t good but that’s what I could think of..is this okay?
Answer:
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Explanation:
Tips:
Maybe instead of saying "ain't nothing I want more than your love" say "I want nothing more than your love" for a classier and more professional line.
I would reccommend taking out "you're a catipiller, you're becoming a beuatiful butterfly" because in my opinion it almost seems like your belittling the person you love. Try using a different metaphor.
"ill love you to the day that I die" should be "I'll love you till the day that I die" which I might also change because it sounds very similar to a line in the song "Piano Man" by Billy Joel. Just a tip.
When you say "love is all I need, love is all I want" maybe say "your love is all I need, your love is all I want"
Advice:
Try creating stanzas, it will help your poem look more finished.
Compliments:
I love the comparison "like roses you have thorns" and "like a bull I have horns" cause that's basically you admitting that you know neither of you are perfect.
I love your ending, it's very well thought out.
I hope I helped!
Have a lovely day!