1answer.
Ask question
Login Signup
Ask question
All categories
  • English
  • Mathematics
  • Social Studies
  • Business
  • History
  • Health
  • Geography
  • Biology
  • Physics
  • Chemistry
  • Computers and Technology
  • Arts
  • World Languages
  • Spanish
  • French
  • German
  • Advanced Placement (AP)
  • SAT
  • Medicine
  • Law
  • Engineering
Dmitry [639]
3 years ago
5

Read the passage, which lacks vivid description, strong imagery, and dialogue. Then rewrite the passage to include description a

nd dialogue in a way that shows Denise is relieved and joyful.
Passage
Just as the final school bell rang, Ms. Smithers handed Denise the math test. Denise turned away and flipped it over to reveal the grade, and then she stepped out into the hallway and closed the door. She felt happy. Denise walked down the school hallway and out into the afternoon where her mother was waiting. Denise showed her the test, and her mother was happy too.
English
1 answer:
Furkat [3]3 years ago
6 0

Answer:

Cheesy adjectives and add many many unnecessarily fluffy descriptions

Explanation:

All you need to do is maybe replace "felt happy" with "her heart pounded with happiness"/"walked down the school hallway" to "excitedly waltzed down the hallway and into the basking rays of the radiant sun" or something of the such and some dialogue lines in between Denise and her mom.  

I think you'll be fine for vivid descriptions and strong imagery as long as you elaborate on Denise's feelings a bit more. I'll give you some bits you can use: "a warm smile", "stomach fluttered", "'I'm proud of the results of my hard work!'"

Anything cheesy should be perfectly enough to satisfy your teacher.

(Apologies that I have not given you a paragraph to copy-paste. Hopefully these pointers can guide you a bit :))

You might be interested in
Two facts about tornadoes
larisa [96]
They are natural disasters
6 0
3 years ago
Read 2 more answers
Either Of the boys are coming today. Find The Error
Amiraneli [1.4K]
Instead of either it should be ‘all’.
6 0
3 years ago
Read 2 more answers
I need help writing a pyramid plot analysis for The Rocking Horse Winner by D. H. Lawrence.
nexus9112 [7]

Answer:

The story describes a young middle-class English woman who "had no luck." Although outwardly successful, she is haunted by a sense of failure; her husband is not good and her job as a commercial artist does not earn as much as she would like. Family life exceeds their income and unspoken anxiety about money permeates the home. Her children, a son Paul and her two sisters, feel this anxiety; children even say they can hear the house whispering, "There must be more money."

Paul tells his uncle Oscar Cresswell about gambling on horse races with Bassett, the outfielder. He has been making bets using his pocket money and has won and saved three hundred and twenty pounds. Sometimes he says he is "sure" of a winner for an upcoming race and that the horses he names win, sometimes with remarkable odds. Uncle Oscar and Bassett make big bets on the horses that Paul names.

After more profit, Paul and Oscar arrange to give the mother a gift of £ 5,000, but the gift only allows her to spend more. Disappointed, Paul tries harder than ever to be "lucky". As the Derby approaches, Paul is determined to learn the winner. Concerned about his health, his mother returns home from a party and discovers his secret. He has spent hours riding his rocking horse, sometimes overnight, until he "gets there," to a clairvoyant state where he can be sure of the winner's name.

On the other hand, the pyramid explanation always starts from an important or more pathognomonic point of the analysis, and then it is explained in different aspects. Ideally, the topic of the pyramid peak should be the most relevant and, as it develops, it should cover other less relevant topics, thus considering the less important topics as those of the "base".

Explanation:

Think of a pyramid structure that starts at the top as a single point and expands more as we go to different lower levels.

4 0
3 years ago
What did the twins agree on?
OlgaM077 [116]

Answer:

The Blue Jays and the Minnesota Twins have agreed to a trade that will send right-handed starter José Berríos to Toronto, the teams announced Friday. The Twins will receive outfielder/infielder Austin Martin and right-hander Simeon Woods-Richardson in return.

Explanation:

8 0
2 years ago
What is the part of speech of the underlined phrase in the following sentence?
RSB [31]
I think the answer is noun.
5 0
3 years ago
Other questions:
  • In "Depression the Secret We Share" , PART B: Which detail from the text best identifies the central idea of the text?
    9·2 answers
  • Read the passage.
    13·2 answers
  • What is the prefix in the word implacable? <br> A. im- <br> B. -plac <br> C. -le <br> D. -able
    10·1 answer
  • How would you change “to drive to the grocery store” to make it parallel with “reading my mom’s list of instructions”?
    14·1 answer
  • Define lynching. Use statistics in your definition.
    7·1 answer
  • What punctuation or abbreviations are used in an in-text citation?
    10·1 answer
  • What beliefs did the nazi have towards the Jewish community
    11·2 answers
  • HELP ME OUT PLEASE!!!!!!!!!
    10·2 answers
  • Why do scientists study seismographs?
    7·2 answers
  • In at least four sentences, describe a scenarios in your personal or professional life where printing labels would make things m
    15·1 answer
Add answer
Login
Not registered? Fast signup
Signup
Login Signup
Ask question!