Poem for tmrw. Last one ughh. Last poem my teacher gonna grade so... By the way tell me what you liked or what I should fix it i

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Poem for tmrw. Last one ughh. Last poem my teacher gonna grade so... By the way tell me what you liked or what I should fix it i

s called move on.
Look around,
Buy yearbooks and exchange numbers,
See the friends you love,
And say I will see you next school year,

Everyone smiling it is your last day,
But the ones leaving have hopes to find a new place,
Everyone has to move on one time in there life,
But they know leaving brings a new surprise,

Today is that day when I will say,
Move on,
Look for the things you wish,
Find happens in world even when it won’t fit,

Be the change,
Be the spark,
Be the smile,
And last but not least be you.

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2 answers:

Savatey [412] · Answer 1 · 2022-07-09T08:54:42+03:00

Savatey [412]3 years ago

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for the line "Everyone smiling it is your last day," try breaking it up (can even just add a comma) or another line won't hurt

goldfiish [28.3K] · Answer 2 · 2022-07-09T07:24:22+03:00

goldfiish [28.3K]3 years ago

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I love the last line the only thing I see is you could use stronger words