This would be a metaphor since Jeremy is compared to a hawk, not literally applicable
The tense is all mixed up, but it looks like present is used most often, so "emitted" should be changed to "emits" and "pulled" should be changed to "pulls." I can't see the entire paragraph so just make sure that's consistent.
You don't need a comma in "running towards us with the fire extinguisher."
"Your mother and me" should be "Your mother and I." For reference try taking our "your mother" - it sounds pretty silly to say "me thinks" unless you're in the 1600s, right? And it should be "think" instead of "thinks."
The answer is: structure.
The division of a poem has to do with its structure. It is written in stanzas and lines. The use of rhythm, the lenght, the placement and the grouping of the lines and the stanzas are also important to divide the poem and to express the ideas the writer wants to.
