Can you show the paper so I can understand. Like in the paragraph
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Hello. You did not show the passages to which the question refers and I was unable to find them, however I know what texts you are referring to and so I will help you.
In one of the passages the relationship between Guinevere and Lancelot is presented in a very cold way, where Lancelot is not affected in any way by Guenevere.
In the other section, however, this reality changes, and Guinevere and Lancelot have a friendly relationship, based on the friendship between the two.
Explanation:
Guinevere and Lancelot are very important characters in the chronicles of King Arthur, Guinevere being married to the king and Lancelot the best friend of the king.
Guinevere and Lancelot have different relationships during the plot, they start the story with little interaction and animosity, where Lancelot seems to be unaffected by her and barely notices her presence, however this relationship evolves until creating an amide between the two, which continues to evolve until they become lovers.
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If you want the honest feedback, I got you. I was really good, but I have a few suggestions to make it sound more "official":
- Italicize sounds (i.e. change "Thud!" to <em>Thud. </em>in the second paragraph)
- Make sure formatting is reasonable and consistent: "1 month later" is too big, the title should be bigger and "Beanbag" is incorrect (it's bean bag)
- Suspense would work very well in this story. I wouldn't reveal who the speaker is until the last paragraph or even last sentence. To do this, you can touch more on the emotional aspects of this story in the introduction and body paragraphs (no naming names, places, things, etc.) Make it abstract as you can to build up to the answers: Who is talking? What happened to them? Why do they feel this way? Things like that.
- Stop being so repetitive with words like "demon" (maybe substitute for "little devil" or "menace")
- I see the humorous aspect of this story, but I would make sure to not include too many spelling and grammar mistakes.
Sorry if my suggestions are a little too intense, but I can tell you are a good writer and can easily improve in these areas! Please let me know if this helps!
Answer:
Yes.
Explanation:
If he was the only drummer then of course.