Question

Can someone if this story is good? I made it. It is called The Tree Tragedy!

Answer 1

Answer:

I feel like the ending is a bit boring, and I didn't develop any feelings or care for the characters getting harmed, also I think that you should slow down the story, it seems like everything just happened and it sorta goes TOO fast. I'm only saying these things because i'd like to see you succeed, also one more thing! When I first read this story, I didn't feel like the introduction grabbed my attention, and the tree house kind of seemed like they were at some abandoned building in the middle of a forest. LAST THING!! I'd like to know what could possibly be knocking down the tree, perhaps you could add something that makes it seem like the tree house is closing in on them, and an entity can be seen from inside of the branches. Something that just elaborates on what is hurting them, so we can get more of a bone chilling feel from whatever entity is throwing them around. I hope this helps!

Answer 2

This is a really good story! If you continue it I would definitely read it! I would add a couple things to it to make the stranger seem more mysterious. Just to make it interesting.