Question: to answer this you need to provide the story as well.
Your thesis statement is a bit wordy. Omit the phrase "and other problems." Change the wording in the latter half of your thesis, as it makes it sound like you are trying to regulate the consequences, not the thing itself. You should also list the consequences. Here's an example of a thesis statement that would sound better (corrections are in bold):
Advancements in genetic engineering such as designer babies have impacted people's lives by getting rid of genetic diseases<u>;</u> however, these advancements should be regulated because of their many consequences, including [consequences here].
It is Proofreading, it can't be revising because your not actually changing anything, your just looking for the errors.
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