Pennsylvania was governed by a member of the Penn family until the beginning of the Revolutionary War. -Passive voice
The colony remained committed to William Penn's ideals for this span of so very many, long years. -Wordiness
As governor of the colony, the first constitution was written by Penn and called for an elected legislature. -Subject-verb agreement error
Penn's Christian values extended to the Native Americans, he paid them for the land and refused to exploit them. -Comma splice
A Quaker, Penn sort of hoped Pennsylvania would be a haven for his fellow Quakers who faced continual persecution in England. -Informal word
William Penn valued religious freedom and self-government, he established the colony of Pennsylvania in 1682 as a welcoming land for others with similar values. Pronoun-antecedent agreement.
Several grammatical and stylistic blunders occurred in the sentences above. Wordiness occurred when several words that would have been substituted for just one were used. Subject-verb agreement error happened when the verb did not correlate with the subject in the sentence.
'Sort of hoped' is an informal phrase. Passive voice occurs when the subject received the action of the verb. Pronoun-antecedent agreement error is the absence of a symbiotic relationship between the pronoun and the phrases that come after it.
