Answer:
Yes but there's a mistake.
Mistake: Some where in the middle
It says "Oh hey, my im Osric, we better get started".
You have to fix Oh hey, my im Osric to, "Oh hey, I'm Osric".
But, other things are that this is very creative, it mentions words like, "Vividly, rare, miniature, rigid, desolate and lingered. These are very creative words.
And yes, thanks for that awesome lil' story!
Sentence b does not use an adverb clause
To explain some of the obstacles she faces.
The conflict is that the wife's husband is turning into a human at night.