50 points!!! pls help me correct my punctuations if i have one and can you correct my run- on sentences because my techer said i
have run-on sentences. and can you make it a little better and realistic and fun easy to read but dont change the subject of the story just make the words a litte better than mine. ESSAY: I was running and running to catch a butterfly it was really small and kinda fast i was running running my heart was beating so fast and my legs keeps getting weaker and weaker trying to catch the butterfly Then I realize I got lost in the woods by catching the butterfly. i am in the woods because I and my family went on a trip to the woods just relax and have fun the time I got lost was in noon time so it's not that dark in the woods but still creepy. Just then I saw something in the bush it rustle and moved, I was too afraid to check what it was or to even go near it. My heart was pounding really hard that I can't move and I was getting kinda light-headed. Then it came out as a rabbit, and I was relieved it was just a rabbit it could have been worse. Then I notice that the rabbit was no ordinary rabbit it was the Silver Fox Rabbit. I knew it because of its fur I was mostly black had some whitish-gray on it I read books about rare rabbits, and I knew it was a rare type of breed rabbit. it's almost getting late, what I am supposed to do I am so scared. Scary birds are chirping creepily and bugs on the floor are annoying änts are my thes are annoying me I can't stand them anymore. I was crying and crying then I heard a familier of voices echoing into the woods first I thought it was just my or my imagination my parents. Soon of folowing their voices I found them. my face uncontrollably and then started crying like a baby happy to see them again. I was so happy to see my parents again i think they have forgotten about me and left without looking for me but I was wrong. They were really angry at me though when they find out that I got lost in the woods without saying anything. My parents said that don't you be wandering off into the woods without our permission maybe there is something bad that can happen to you there, you could have gotten hurt there. were not hurt there. were not gonna know that you got hurt because you in the woods so don't be wandering off without one of us is supervising you Now that I found my way back I was so happy and relieved. Now were . preparing our stuff to go back home we put our stuff in the back of the car but we put the little stuff inside the car because all of our stuff is not gonna fit in the back of the car so use did that when we were done packing up we went inside the car , my dad was driving our car while my mom stays at the in the front seat while i was in the back seat. I was telling them that i found a rabbit and told them about how creepy the woods is while being alone and told them about the bugs are annoying.
I was running and running to catch a butterfly it was really small and kinda fast I was running my heart was beating so fast and my legs keep getting weaker and weaker trying to catch the butterfly Then I realize I got lost in the woods by catching the butterfly. I am in the woods because I and my family went on a trip to the woods just to relax and have fun the time I got lost was at noontime so it's not that dark in the woods but still creepy. Just then I saw something in the bush it rustle and moved, I was too afraid to check what it was or to even go near it. My heart was pounding hard that I can't move and I was getting kinda light-headed. Then it came out like a rabbit, and I was relieved it was just a rabbit it could have been worse. Then I notice that the rabbit was no ordinary rabbit it was the Silver Fox Rabbit. I knew it because of its fur I was mostly black had some whitish-gray on it I read books about rare rabbits, and I knew it was a rare type of breed rabbit. it's almost getting late, what I am supposed to do I am so scared. Scary birds are chirping creepily and bugs on the floor are annoying änts are my these are annoying me I can't stand them anymore. I was crying and crying then I heard a familiar of voices echoing into the woods first I thought it was just my or my imagination my parents. Soon of following their voices I found them. my face uncontrollably and then started crying like a baby happy to see them again. I was so happy to see my parents again I think they have forgotten about me and left without looking for me but I was wrong. They were really angry at me though when they find out that I got lost in the woods without saying anything. My parents said that don't you be wandering off into the woods without our permission maybe there is something bad that can happen to you there, you could have gotten hurt there. were not hurt there. we're not gonna know that you got hurt because you in the woods so don't be wandering off without one of us is supervising you Now that I found my way back I was so happy and relieved. Now were. preparing our stuff to go back home we put our stuff in the back of the car but we put the little stuff inside the car because all of our stuff is not gonna fit in the back of the car so use did that when we were done packing up we went inside the car, my dad was driving our car while my mom stays at the in the front seat while I was in the back seat. I was telling them that I found a rabbit and told them about how creepy the woods is while being alone and told them about the bugs are annoying.
I was running and running to catch a butterfly. It was really small and kind of fast. I was running and running and my heart was beating so fast and my legs keeps getting weaker and weaker trying to catch the butterfly. Then I realize I got lost in the woods by catching the butterfly. I am in the woods because me and my family went on a trip to the woods to just relax and have fun. The time I got lost was at noon time so it's not that dark in the woods but still creepy. Just then I saw something in the bush and it rustled and moved, I was too afraid to check what it was or to even go near it. My heart was pounding really hard that I couldn't move and I was getting kind of light-headed. Then it came out and it was a rabbit. I was relieved it was just a rabbit as it could have been worse. Then I noticed that the rabbit was no ordinary rabbit, but it was the Silver Fox Rabbit. I knew it because of its fur I was mostly black had some whitish-gray fur on it. I read books about rare rabbits, and I knew it was a rare type of breed. It was almost getting late, and I didn't know what I was supposed to do because I was afraid. Scary birds were chirping creepily and bugs on the floor were annoying. These ants were annoying me and I couldn't stand it any further. I was crying and crying, but just then I heard familiar voices echoing into the woods. First I thought it was just my imagination of my parents. Soon after following their voices I found them. I uncontrollably crying like a baby, just happy to see them again. I was so happy to see my parents again. I thought they had forgotten about me and left without looking for me but I was wrong. They were really angry at me though when they found out that I got lost in the woods without saying anything. My parents said that, "Don't you be wandering off into the woods without our permission. Maybe something bad can happen to you there, and you could have gotten hurt there. You weren't hurt there, but we're not gonna know if you got hurt because you in the woods. So don't be wandering off without one of us supervising you." Now that I had found my way back I was so happy and relieved. Now we're preparing our stuff to go back home and we put our stuff in the back of the car. But we put the little stuff inside the car because all of our stuff is not gonna fit in the back of the car. My dad was driving our car while my mom sat in the in the front seat while I was in the back seat. I was telling them that I found a rabbit and told them about how creepy the woods is while being alone and told them about how the bugs are annoying.
