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If you want the honest feedback, I got you. I was really good, but I have a few suggestions to make it sound more "official":
- Italicize sounds (i.e. change "Thud!" to <em>Thud. </em>in the second paragraph)
- Make sure formatting is reasonable and consistent: "1 month later" is too big, the title should be bigger and "Beanbag" is incorrect (it's bean bag)
- Suspense would work very well in this story. I wouldn't reveal who the speaker is until the last paragraph or even last sentence. To do this, you can touch more on the emotional aspects of this story in the introduction and body paragraphs (no naming names, places, things, etc.) Make it abstract as you can to build up to the answers: Who is talking? What happened to them? Why do they feel this way? Things like that.
- Stop being so repetitive with words like "demon" (maybe substitute for "little devil" or "menace")
- I see the humorous aspect of this story, but I would make sure to not include too many spelling and grammar mistakes.
Sorry if my suggestions are a little too intense, but I can tell you are a good writer and can easily improve in these areas! Please let me know if this helps!
<span>D. Don Pedro treats him like a servant.
Don Pedro, through the course of the play, actually treats Don John quite well. He, along with Leonato, welcomes Don John into the house to stay for an extended period of time. At no point does Don Pedro treat his brother like a servant. </span>
Playwrights use stage directions to give more insight into how the characters should be interacting with each other. Shakespeare uses actually very few stage directions compared to some modern playwrights who detail every move a character is supposed to make.
Stage directions help develop the plot because they help the actors and audience physically move in the space to move the action forward. For example, in Caesar we get the stage direction "<span>CASCA first, then the other Conspirators and BRUTUS stab CAESAR". We understand through the dialogue that they are going to stab Caesar, but this gives us the person who stabs first and the person who stabs last. This helps give meaning to the characters because we learn a lot about Casca (he is the most willing to start the violence) and Brutus (he is still hesitating and it takes him the longest to actually be able to follow through). Also, it develops the plot in the obvious way that if this action does not occur, the rest of the play could not happen.</span>
