Rewrite the following passage to create a vivid “picture” for your readers. Do this by adding sight, sound, taste, touch, and/or
smell details. (Feel free to add extra information as shown in the example.) Example Original Passage: Amy ate breakfast. She had bacon and eggs. Revised Passage: Sitting in her light and breezy kitchen, Amy munched on breakfast. She ate two slices of crunchy, crisp bacon and a fluffy, scrambled egg. Afterwards, she washed it all down with some freshly squeezed grapefruit juice, sour-sweet and refreshing.
Now you try... Original Passage: Benny is my dog. He likes to play. Revised Passage: _________________________________
