It began in March 23 1991 thur January 18 2002
The paragraph is beyond choppy and uncomfortable to read because of it. There are too many short sentences and not enough complex ones, making it hard to follow any kind of flow the paragraph has the potential to offer. Because there were no transitions of any kind, it was hard to try and smoothly combine topics. For example, the first two sentences seem abrupt and confusing standing on their own like that. The narrator went from loving swimming to randomly speaking about the beach, and it was hard to follow until you got to the end of the second sentence, understanding then where the connection was between the two. It is hard to even figure out if the paragraph is about swimming or about the beach, and nothing was incorporated smoothly.
There are tons of things to do at local beaches, and people should spend more time at them instead of hanging out indoors all day. The beach offers a place to develop strong swimming skills, and learning to swim is one of my happiest childhood memories. I am glad I learned to swim at the beach.
Rearranging the way beaches and a love for swimming were introduced allow for it to be more easy to understand.
Maybe try zooming in a little more :)
Angela Vicario is in many ways the main character of the story. She is the most quoted character in the novel, and has the strongest narrative voice. In addition, she is center of the mystery that the narrator is trying to unravel, since she is the only one who knows whether or not Santiago was truly the one who took her virginity, and she remains enigmatic at the end of the story because she never reveals whether or not he was guilty.
Angela Vicario is a distant cousin of the narrator. As a young girl, she was the most beautiful of her four sisters. However, the narrator says she had a "helpless air and a poverty of spirit that augured an uncertain future for her." She used to sit in the window of her house, making cloth flowers, and the narrator thought she looked more and more destitute every year. He says that her "penury of spirit had been aggravated by the years," so much so that when people discovered that Bayardo San Roman wanted to marry her, they thought it was an outsider's plan.
