The story is great but u made some mistakes with spelling and u need to reread the story and need more details in the story and at the end but great draft
The correct sentence should be " When one is an athlete, they should never stay out late at night."
You make this change so that the pronoun they matches with the original noun of one.
Hope this helps!
The correct would be Further⭐️
A a claim someone should not take literally.
