Hi, so based off of your intro the beginning is good I would just add a few more power words. One major concern is that I feel like you mixed two separate thesis’s into one. I feel like you jump back and forth without transition between “However, sports are* played to improve fitness, learn new skills, and also for social purposes. Teens account for an estimated 2 million injuries” If you see what you I mean. I personally would add a little spacer or lead up to the injury part of your paragraph. Other than that I really liked it. Some good words you could change are
- Major to Extensive
- Keen to Enthusiastic
Answer:
Approximately 350,000 American women joined the military during World War II. They worked as nurses, drove trucks, repaired airplanes, and performed clerical work. Some were killed in combat or captured as prisoners of war. Over sixteen hundred female nurses received various decorations for courage under fire.
Rhythmic scheme(this is the part that rhymes) and or the catchy part
Answer:
Heyaa!! Im <em>Pinky!!</em> Im here to inform you that your answer is...
Explanation:
!!! <em>"Timon bent the old, rusty, hanger back into shape." </em>!!!
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<em> That is the best way for this particular sentence to be written.</em>
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<em> </em><em>Have An Amazing Day!!</em>
<em> </em><u><em>~Pinky~</em></u>
Yes. Calling out is acceptable only when you are doing it for a good reason. Calling out isn’t acceptable when you’re doing it in a rude/mean way.