For the purpose of remembering to utilize it in his cross-examination, the prosecuting attorney made a note in reference to the
defendant's anger when speaking about the victim. Which choice BEST revises the sentence to cut down on wordiness while retaining the sentence's meaning?
A) The prosecuting attorney made a note about the defendant's anger when speaking about the victim, so he could utilize it in his cross-examination.
B) For the purpose of utilizing it in his cross-examination, the prosecuting attorney made a note about the defendant's anger when speaking about the victim.
C) The prosecuting attorney made a note about the defendant's anger when speaking about the victim for the purpose of utilizing it in his cross-examination.
D) For the purpose of remembering to utilize it in his cross-examination, the prosecuting attorney made a note about the defendant's anger when speaking about the victim.
A) The prosecuting attorney made a note about the defendant's anger when speaking about the victim, so he could utilize it in his cross-examination.
This is best revises the original sentence for wordiness. The words eliminated are "For the purpose of remembering to". Taking out these prepositional phrases focuses the dependent clause on the verb utilize rather than the actions of remembering and purpose. This helps to eliminate confusion or distractions for the reader. One way to help eliminate answers is that option D does not really make any changes. Option B and C are the same except for the placement of the dependent clause. Moving the dependent clause does not actually change the wordiness of the sentence.
Sentence 5 talks about looking for alternate energy sources but doesn't specifically mention solar energy so it is wrong. Sentence 10 says that solar energy is a "significant development" but it doesn't provide specific evidence so it is also not correct. Sentence 6 is the best answer - it shows that it is already being used and it has the potential to be used even more.
