It felt like everything turned into slow motion after I tried to reach for that darn balloon. I remember I was having a good time listing to music drinking my Sprite that my mother gave me during our picnic outside today around 3:00 pm. Later on all of the sudden I start feeling nothing in my left arm. The ballon goes flying and I try to chase it and try
catching it when all of the sudden I feel my world is becoming slower in my eyes and my eyesight starts to get dark and that’s when I hit the floor straight to the puddle where I once felt the water drops on my feet.
Answer:
the story that I are is one poem
The only error I can see in this sentence is roll-a-coaster. I believe it should be a roller coaster instead, which is a ride in amusement parks. Other than that, it is more grammatically correct to say "I've just gotten off the wooden" rather than "I just got off the wooden" however, it's up to you.
