Question

(1) Renee had been very careful about her costume choice. (2) Anne had told her that there would be a prize for the best costume, and Renee wanted to win. (3) She’d decided to dress up as a zombie. (4) Her mother had helped with the makeup, and Renee’s sister had found a messy wig for her to wear. (5) Renee felt very confident as she rang the doorbell. (6) Renee felt a furious blush spread across her cheeks. (7) All of her excitement, however, disappeared when the door opened and she saw the other party guests. (8) No one else was wearing a costume.
Which revision BEST creates effective and appropriate organization for this story?
A) Move sentence 3 to follow sentence 4.
B) Move sentence 6 to follow sentence 8.
C) Move sentence 7 to follow sentence 5.
D) Move sentence 8 to follow sentence 1.

Answer 1

B.

By moving sentence 6 to follow sentence 8 it is showing her embarrassment after she had found out the party was not a costume party. (almost like Mean Girls. if you've ever seen that)