Question

The Human Resources department is happy to announce a career development workshop. Led by Joseph Pelletier. He has 20 years of experience in career development training. Joseph will help you gain a clearer understanding of your career goals. He will discuss tools to work toward those goals. The workshop will take place November 10 and 11. From 9:30 a.m. to 5:30 p.m. There will be coffee and tea, lunch will also be provided. If you are interested, please respond to this e-mail to sign up, only 40 spaces are available.how could you improve this message?

Answer 1

Answer

Correct comma splice, Correct Fragment, Vary sentence types

Explanation:

From the question given, on how to improve this message i will use the following methods which are

• Correct comma splice
• Correct Fragments
• Vary sentence types

Comma splice: It is two independent clauses are put together incorrectly  by a comma to make a sentence. To avoid this problem, an independent clause. must first be identified.

Correct fragments: A fragments can be used correctly on two ways,

one is including the main clause in a passage, secondly Whether adding  or connecting, you must use the right punctuation connecting the fragment to a main clause already in the passage.

Vary sentence types: when you can combine more ideas to develop more complex sentences, when you noticed too many short sentences.