"Oh!," said Goldilocks, "the controlling idea is too vague. As a reader, I can't tell what your essay will really be about. When writing a controlling idea you want to be specific."
Paragraph 2.
"Oh my," exclaimed Goldilocks. "This controlling idea is too wordy. A controlling idea should be clear and concise. That was I will know what your essay is about."
Paragraph 3.
"Well, well," Goldilocks said. "this controlling idea doesn't address the prompt. When you look at what it is asking you to write, don't you see how it is asking you to explain the importance? This just says it is is important. But I do like how you thought of another word that means to not give up!"
If you have won any awards or competed you could start a paragraph by that. you could explain why art is something you enjoy. Or you could also give reasons why art is something you do like if it relieves stress.
William Butler Yeats use setting to communicate his message in “The Wild Swans at Coole” to reveal the desire for a more ideal existence. Yeats view of nature describes that nature is timeless and beautiful.
So as has to clarify things either gw go back to repronounce or when he should concentrate on his reading and make sure he pronounce every little word well.
