There too were green colored people, with their strange and unpleasant offspring, doing whatever pleases them so, living ing thier weird green selfs, passing me strange their strange green faces.
I personally thought they would appear to be as Johnny Depp (love his work), but they looked to me more as Sid from the Ice Age. Before I knew it, the leader decided to attempt to communicate with me, but to no surpise, I didn't understand their non-English language.
Ok so you are trying to write in 1st person point of view. However, the protagonist isn’t writing something that is happening at the moment. Instead, the protagonist is writing what happened to him or her in a period of their life because if they were writing in the present moment they would probably be dead. So your story should go more like this “All of the sudden I realized I wasn’t alone. I turned back and saw people who had green colored skin and by their sides were their green children. My head was very confused, I thought “What weird people! They live in their ugly green bodies, living their own way and looking at me with their weird green faces”
For the 2nd paragraph correct your gramatical errors. “Johnny Depp;” “...ice age. Then, the leader” “...with me. But, I didn’t understand any other language other than English”
It’s pretty good and it’s very original you just need to get your ideas in order. Hope I helped you
a character who undergoes scientific internal change throughout the course of a story the development of a dynamic characters often step total and unstated and is not due to a change of a character circumstances
