“Works of art often tell stories. Artists can present narrative in many ways—by using a series of images representing moments in a story’’
ANSWER: “You’re a rotten driver,” I protested. “Ether you ought to be more careful, or you oughtn’t to drive at all.” Jordan Baker
“You said a bad driver was only safe until she met another bad driver? Well, I met another bad driver, didn't I? I mean it was careless of me to makes such a wrong guess. I thought you were rather an honest, straightforward person I thought it was your secret pride.” Jordan Baker
“It takes two to make an accident”
Scott Fitzgerald
Hello!
I don't find the paragraph to be too wordy at all. I don't understand the entire context of the paragraph, only because I don't know the topic that it is written on. Despite this, I was still able to follow the meaning of the paragraph.
Something that I did notice is that you have one run-on sentence in your paragraph. You wrote "The only thing they solved was why Hope was in that picture, she photobombed a family picture, they gave her the printed version because they deleted the original and didn't want her in it, she cut the family out and wrote on the back, 'Don't go to the subway.'"
Instead, you could reword it into multiple different sentences to make the idea complete. I would recommend you turn this section into: "The only thing they solved was why Hope was in that picture. She photobombed a family picture and they gave her the printed version because they deleted the original one and didn't want her in it. She cut the family out and wrote on the back, 'Don't go to the subway.'"
I hope this helps you! Have a lovely day!
- Mal
Any communication that belittles a person or group on the basis of characteristics
What passage is Hannah in I need to dialogue to answer
