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Planning on sending this member to a higher up government official or something of that sort, it isnt done yet but any edits/things i should add on? this is important, im mainly looking for ideas/things that could make my argument stronger. please tell me how it sounds so far as well!
Mental illness is a real thing that people can’t control without support and its something that needs to be addressed. If not dealt with, internal problems can result in irrational and dangerous behavior. Illnesses like schizophrenia, dissociative identity disorder, and other disorders/illnesses related to hallucinations, either auditory or visual can be dangerous for numerous reasons. Even disorders/illnesses considered lesser, or more common, like depression, bipolar disorder, anxiety, and ocd can be dangerous if they are left untalked about. Lack of support can lead to death and crime, without proper help, people might harm others or themselves. You shouldn't have to pay money to deal with something you cant control. Mental help needs to be available for those who aren’t capable of paying for the help they need themselves. Some mental illnesses and disabilities can cause people to struggle financially, and can even lead to homelessness. People need support as early as possible so they can hopefully lead a comfortable life. But without help, mentally challenged members of society might struggle through life.

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Good Job!

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The topic you chose was very good and the paragraphs hold a lot of information. I would check over grammar one more time I suggest "Grammarly" and send it in!!!