They excerpt shows details because it over describes the situation that he is in
His breathing became heavy
<span>I think it could happen because the girl (don't remember their names sorry) snuck onto the ship where she wasn't supposed to go. Obviously if you do something wrong, no necessarily sneaking onto a spaceship, there are always consequences. The man did try to save her life, but there wasn't much he could do because it was too late for both of them to survive.</span>
The use of the comma here is incorrect because t<span>hese are two independent clauses and should be separated by a semi-colon or a period not a comma. Hope this is what you are looking for. </span>
Answer:
Deal with the literary devices
