You need a comma after "at first". get rid of the second period in the fourth sentence. get rid of "but only the buildings."
More information please? What story?
Characters dialogue would be my answer. is the best to look at.
You may be in a different school, sorry but some of us may not be able to help you. You could try giving us more information on what the Figurative Language Story #3 is, then we can answer completely. Thanks.
