It was Peter Vanderdonk, a descendant of a historian, who convinced the villagers to accept Rip Van Winkle's story. He said that everything Rip described about the time period he was coming from was true, and that there was no need to doubt his words. Thus, everyone believed Peter (as he was a successor of a learned man) and Rip was readmitted into his society.
Malgudi Days, written by R.K Narayan, chronicles the lives of people in the fictional town of Malgudi. The stories, which share the lives of everyone from entrepreneurs to beggars, all take place in and near this Indian village. The village is a place where most people are haunted by illiteracy and unemployment. Among the stories the reader meets an astrologer, a gatekeeper, and a young man yearning to pass the examinations. There are also animals including a forlorn dog who befriends a blind man and a ferocious tiger (perhaps a hint of Narayan's short novel, A Tiger for Malgudi). Above all there is a pervasive irony that reminded me of other short story stylists from O'Henry to Chekhov and Gogol. More often a character's dreams or expectations do not lead to the results he desires. This keeps the reader guessing as to what the next story will show in the lives of people who become endlessly fascinating, if only for the reason that you have met them before in your own town.
Imagine a storm is a parade, its booming trough the the town.
imagine the wind is the trumpets, they their music blows through your hair
imagine thunder is the drumline, the loud bangs rhythmically fill your ears.
imagine lightning is the crash cymbals they shine in your eyes follwed by a crash
imagine rain is the confetti, being thrown up to fall back down onto your face
imagine stars are fireflies, they light up in the darkest times to be seen
Imagine the sun is a light bulb, it lights up the world and never goes out
The rain suddenly started.
all of a sudden it started to rain.
suddenly, it started to rain.
it began raining all of a sudden.
I think you should say “she accepted her invitation” instead of request. Maybe a little more background story? Unless you’re gonna make it into like a detective story where the short story makes a bigger picture. Maybe instead of her getting lost so soon, she meets up a friend, they both get lost, eventually meet the clown. You did great I like it so far, but its the little details that add that pizzaz. Ex: At that moment Samantha had realized her mistake, as she spent the time trick or treating the sky grew dark and ominous, a feeling like she had never felt before, true fear.
