<span> It is rather for us to be here dedicated to the great task remaining before us— that from these honored dead we take increased devotion to that cause for which they gave the last full measure of devotion—that we here highly resolve that these dead shall not have died in vain—that this nation, under God, shall have a new birth of freedom—and that government of the people, by the people, for the people, shall not perish from the earth.
This statement is reminding the Northerners to stay as loyal as those who had perished in the battle were</span>
The balloon rocketed into the sky. Though we were frightened, everything ended up being fine.
- The word "quickly" can be removed because speed is implied with the word "rocketed"
- The phrase "into the really cold air" can be removed because it is irrelevant to what's happening. It can be replaced by "into the sky"
- Now "up" can be removed because "into the sky" implies that the balloon went upwards.
- Either the word "scared" or "frightened" can be removed because they're synonyms (I chose to remove "scared")
- "Because it was moving really fast" can be removed because the use of the word "rocketed" beforehand already implies that the balloon was moving fast.
- Lastly , I just reworded and conjoined some of the sentences to make them read more clearly though this isn't necessary. (I changed the third sentence from "However, it was all good in the end," to "everything ended up being fine." I also combined the second and third sentences, adding "though" in front of the second sentence to make it a dependent clause)
This is usually true bc he thought he was better than everyone else
Jack London’s “The Human Drift” is an expository text whose main argument is expressed in its very first line:
The history of civilisation is a history of wandering, sword in hand, in search of food.
Throughout the story, London builds and supports the main argument using a structure of small paragraphs. He builds a premise and logically arrives at the conclusion. The premises are also interspersed with examples and historical evidence, both from historic and prehistoric times, to strengthen the supporting argument, as shown in the following lines:
From Central Europe the Aryans have drifted into Asia, and from Central Asia the Turanians have drifted across Europe… The Phoenicians and the Greeks, with unremembered drifts behind them, colonised the Mediterranean. Rome was engulfed in the torrent of Germanic tribes drifting down from the north before a flood of drifting Asiatics. The Angles, Saxons, and Jutes, after having drifted whence no man knows, poured into Britain, and the English have carried this drift on around the world. Retreating before stronger breeds, hungry and voracious, the Eskimo has drifted to the inhospitable polar regions, the Pigmy to the fever-rotten jungles of Africa. And in this day the drift of the races continues, whether it be of Chinese into the Philippines and the Malay Peninsula, of Europeans to the United States or of Americans to the wheat-lands of Manitoba and the Northwest.
The evidence above justifies London’s main argument “The history of civilization is a history of wandering…” He then introduces his next argument—man is afraid of death—and then he continues to strengthen this argument using the structure of citing examples and tracing man’s journey from the prehistoric to the modern times.
