Hi I think you did a pretty good job on this, but as you know nothing is perfect!
I would recommend adding more transitions, ending it with something more special, use more advanced words than the basic ones, more parallelism and have a better intro but overall I think it's very lovely.
Also you could say something like "Today, I would like to thank all those incredible people who have helped me become who I am today and show my gratitude through this small essay/or whatever.
Answer:the old ladies he lives with
Explanation:
I think it is a complex and fragment sentene
