A peer revision shouldn't be just written as a quick bullet point list. Peer revisions should be in the complete format, should be in sentences with all the necessary things in it. Well, if needed then you should construct it including your bullet points.
Based on the description above, the theory that best
describes this examples of development of sadism is behavioral theory. It is
because a behavioral theory focuses more on the consequences or antecedents in which
are being analyze in order to explain an individual’s human behavior.
One effect was that construction of residential homes was breaking all recent records. I don’t know if you have to paraphrase it because these are the exact words from the document.
