This is for English, keep in mind I'm not done. I got poor feedback on my other other song."taking my life isn't appropriate for

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3 years ago

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This is for English, keep in mind I'm not done. I got poor feedback on my other other song."taking my life isn't appropriate for

school" It'll be appropriate when I'm dead. Anyways, how is this one so far, and what should I change?
I know you don't wanna be hurt

I mean it's clear girl

I heard The words

But to me You mean

More than the world

And I'd give Anything

To have one chance

One chance with you girl

English

2 answers:

Verizon [17] · Answer 1 · 2022-07-19T19:14:35+03:00

Verizon [17]3 years ago

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Answer:

I think it's perfect

Explanation:

saying how you feel is always the way to go.. never supress emotions

garri49 [273] · Answer 2 · 2022-07-19T17:07:08+03:00

garri49 [273]3 years ago

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Answer: I think the song is really good, but saying ‘girl’ makes it sound kind of tacky. You could take it out or replace it with something like a one syllable name.