Answer:
By just reading the beginning, I can tell it's pretty good! A few suggestions: Try not to use "also" in the beginning of a sentence. I feel like it sounds a bit unprofessional. This sort of goes for "this also". One last thing, when putting in the name of an article for example, make sure to put quotes. I would also recommend to state where you cited textual evidence, not really for articles, but just for the future. Besides that, looking good!
I know it's pretty late but I thought I'd still respond
Avoid it, not go near, stay away.
Answer:
I am faced with my imminent demise; therefore, life becomes a very precious thing.
Explanation:
The semicolon is like a comma. But longer.
See here, in this sentence, you are separating the imminent demise from the fact that life is precious.
Explanation:
wait wait where is the bar graph
