If it were me? 0 bc I ain't touching anyone, unless ik them
The fascinators had the commands of working, playing and sleeping for eight hours a day printed under each of them. The idea was to systematize their lives and deprived them from the priviledge of thinking. There was a third of the day which had to be dedicated to the most basic activities in life.
3. It was thought to be an accident
4. Shansville, Pennsylvania
5. All of above
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I think your descriptions are great! I like the way you describe the setting and how it makes the observer feel with extreme detail. I was able to picture everything really well in my head. Moving forwards, I think what you should do is reassess what you're writing about. Maybe I misunderstood what you meant by <em>"describing a moutain," </em>but I feel that you spent too much time talking about the overall setting and how it made the observer feel instead of the actual mountain. I liked your description of the mountain being "a beast arisen from nowhere; its tip to be unseen" and I think you should continue this as you'll prevent yourself from drifting too far from the object of interest.
