Question

Revise the following wordy, unorganized paragraphs. Include an introductory statement followed by a bulleted or numbered list. Look for ways to eliminate unnecessary wording.
Because all casual clothing is not suitable for the office, these guidelines will help you determine what is appropriate to wear to work. Slacks that are similar to Dockers and other makers of cotton or synthetic material pants, wool pants, flannel pants, and attractive dress synthetic pants are acceptable. Casual dresses and skirts hemmed at the knee and lower or slits at or below the knee are acceptable. Dress and skirt length should be at a length at which you can sit comfortably in public. Casual shirts and blouses, dress shirts and blouses, sweaters, tops, golf-type shirts, tunics, and turtlenecks are acceptable attire for work. Most suit jackets or sport jackets are also acceptable attire for the office. Conservative athletic or walking shoes, loafers, clogs, sneakers, boots, flats, dress heels, and leather deck-type shoes are acceptable for work.

Answer 1

Answer:

Revision of wordy, unorganized paragraphs

Our organization's dress code allows suitable office dresses.  Find below the guidelines for allowed dresses:

• Slacks similar to Dockers
• Casual dresses and skirts hemmed at the lower knee
• Comfortable dress and skirt length
• Casual shirts and blouses are acceptable
• Suit and sport jackets
• Conservative athletic or walking shoes

Explanation:

The use of bulleted or numbered lists can help to organize wordy paragraphs.  They also eliminate some of the unnecessary wordings that have been included, thereby reducing the overall length.