The paragraph doesnt flow very well because of all the simple sentences. it has a very simple rythm and the most important ideas are "<span>As a young girl, she struggled a great deal. She left home at 21. She moved to the West Coast. There, she chose to educate herself. She chose studies over security. She lived in poverty for many years. She eventually got a job teaching at university." This is because it stays on topic. Everything else really isnt important.The ideas are all spread out and really dont connect very well. TO improve this paragraph you need to connect the sentenes and change some to stay on topic.</span>
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One person who has impacted my life greatly is my best friend. I know a lot of people say that, but my story is a bit different. You see, my best friend basically saved my life. So, before i met her, I had another best friend, and at the time that girl was my ONLY friend. I have trouble making friends, so i was really grateful i had her. But the bad thing was that we were so MEAN to each other, in ways that friends should never be. We would insult each other's looks and favorite things. If one of us was going through a rough time, the other simply wouldn't care. Her and I were both guilty of it. Then, in the summer of 2018, I moved away. Her and I called every day, and we weren't as mean to each other now that we were physically apart. I ended up moving back one year later, and I immediately had to see her. I missed her so much! The day after my flight landed I went over to her house, and she was so clingy and nice, I thought we finally had a nice friendship. That was until she had her birthday party. When I was away, of course she made a couple of new friends, who she invited to her party. Now the problem isn't what it would seem to be. The problem was that her friends really liked me right away, and she got kinda jealous. It's not like we excluded her or anything, she just wasn't used to not having all of my attention. There were four people in the friend group, excluding My friend and I. Out of those people, the boy in the group is who I got along with the most because of our similar music taste. We would talk about it NON STOP. Now, there was one girl in which i barely talked to, and i didn't really have any interest in getting closer with her. We were friendly with each other, but we just didn't talk much. The more I got farmiliar with the friend group, the more distant me and the boy got, and the closer I got with that girl. I was still best friends with my best friend at the time, but she began to act like her old self: Mean. I remained nice, as I changed when I moved away, but I guess she didn't. Our friend group had it's up's and down's throughout the year. It was the end of the year, around Thanksgiving, when I got the news that my family would be moving away again. I told my friends and they were really sad. I'd just started to get really close to them,
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b. Then, just ahead, a deer and her baby, called a fawn, cautiously stepped right onto the trail in front of Jan and her mom
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The quotation from the answer choices below that demonstrates the use of commas with a nonessential element is option B.
This is because a nonessential clause or phrase means that it can be removed from a sentence without affecting the main idea of the sentence. Commas can be used to set apart nonessential elements.
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