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sorry but i cant be able to see the question
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It's very beautiful and passionate!
Tips:
-you put "once you get to the top" twice so try changing or deleting the second one.
-some common grammar mistakes (capitalize, correct spots for commas/periods, etc).
-try not to use "etc" in your writing.
-you spelled "realize" as relies
Other than those the story was good!! :)
In the sentence:Peace is _ours_ when we accept Christ as Saviour,"ours" is a prounoun.
My improvisation was inspired by the original recording of Yankee Doodle. Some melodies are the same.
The difference was my method has more electronic tools to create my own original Version.
I also did not use the melody in the beginning and increase the rhythm a little bit
Hope this helps
